STATUS: I had a terrific day but can’t blog about why quite yet. So just know I’m in a great mood.
What’s playing on the iPod right now? BROKEN HEARTED HOOVER FIXER SUCKER GUY by Glen Hansard
Life would be good if people would quit asking me impossible questions. *grin*
And yes, I’ve taken the admonishment to do my emoticons correctly.
So this is the situation. Last week we asked for a full manuscript from a partial we had read. The writer emailed to say he was contemplating a big revision shifting POV.
Did I think first person or third person would work best for the story?
My answer? Not the faintest idea.
For some genres, like romance, a first person POV is always a tough sell so in that case, I’d probably recommend third. But for this instant, the manuscript was young adult.
There have certainly been bestsellers in this genre in the first person POV and bestsellers in the third person POV. The real answer is what POV best fits the story and best illustrates the main characters.
If we need to be inside the main character’s head, then first person POV. If the story would benefit from being able to head hop (as you can do in third person), well, then there you have it. But honestly, I can’t read the first 30 pages of a submission and tell you which I think would work better. Perhaps if I saw both submission side-by-side I could make a judgment but it’s very unlikely I would go to that trouble (unless we were talking about a current client).
I heard, and I have no idea if it’s true or not, that Suzanne Collins did the HUNGER GAMES first 50 to 100 pages both ways before choosing the final direction. Makes sense that a writer would need to explore both before making a final decision but ultimately, it’s the writer who will know best what feels right for the story.
At least that’s how I see it.
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STATUS: I got one major contract off my desk and on to somebody else’s at the publishing house. Always a great feeling.
What’s playing on the XM or iPod right now? SOMETIMES YOU CAN'T MAKE IT ON YOUR OWN by U2
Yesterday I was explaining that agents don’t often have time to give detailed feedback because that would entail a critique of the manuscript and doing so is time-consuming.
Well, I should have clarified. Once a year, I always take the time to do exactly that for one lucky auction winner.
I read the 30 pages twice. First read to familiarize myself with the submission and the second read to actually write in-depth critique feedback in track changes of the Word doc. Just like I do for my clients when I read before submitting their material.
So if you want in on that action, it’s time to head over to Brenda Novak’s yearly auction to raise money for diabetes research. My critique page is here. Since I have a good friend plus a brother–in-law with diabetes, this auction is close to my heart.
Happy bidding!
And don’t forget to check out some other great items like a read/critique from Sara Megibow, lunch with Jamie Ford, and if you are a Nathan Bransford fan, he’s offering a critique with a follow up consultation.
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STATUS: Just another manic Monday.
What’s playing on the XM or iPod right now? RED RIVER VALLEY by Frank Macchia and Tierney Sutton
This weekend was an interesting one for me. I read our slush pile for the first time in several years. Grin.
What do I mean by that? Well, I hired Sara Megibow more than four years ago and once she was fully trained, she read all incoming submissions to set aside the ones that I actually needed to review. In other words, I read only a third of all the actual submissions that came to the agency.
As we train Anita, somebody needs to read behind her to make sure she’s forwarding the right submissions on to Sara and to me. Anita will become the reader of all things while Sara and I can have a reduced workload. There isn’t enough time in the day for us to read ALL incoming submissions.
So this weekend I read eleven different sample page submissions and one salient point became very clear. There are decent writers out there who are totally starting their stories in the wrong place which can obscure what the novel is really about. If I’ve read 30 pages and it’s clear to me that we still haven’t gotten to the right beginning, it’s a pass.
So the biggest writing culprit writers need to watch for that will indicate a story starting in the wrong place?
Back story.
One submission had several scenes that weren’t really relevant to where the novel actually started—which was in chapter three (around page 27). The opening scenes were essentially back story—info the writer needs to know but the reader doesn’t. Back story needs to be integrated throughout the novel in a masterful way.
Second biggest culprit?
Minutiae.
In other words, the writer is overcompensating for the wrong beginning by including beginning scenes with too much detail about the characters and all the underlying tension of the relationships so all that is clear before the novel can “begin.” The details are certainly good to have but they are placed in scenes that don’t actually move the story forward. In other words, the only purpose of the scene is to introduce characters. Then by chapter three or four, suddenly we have the actual story.
I know this is happening when I read and think, not bad writing here but this author needs some judicious editing as I’m getting bogged down in details but the story isn’t actually moving forward with momentum and tension.
Writers who are actually ready for agent submission have mastered the art of seamlessly integrating back story and relevant character details into a plot that moves the story forward.
Those who haven’t are probably getting passes on sample pages and no requests for the full (although an agent might highlight there is decent writing on the page).
And I know what you are thinking. Why can’t agents just say this? Because it would take too much time to point it out and clearly illustrate it. That would be critiquing the manuscript which is too time-consuming.
Which is why I’m trying to use this blog entry to point this out. I know examples would help but I don’t have permission from submitters to use their work on this blog.
ps. Thanks for all the embed songs into blog tips. I'll check out the sites and see what I can start using.
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STATUS: Not happy. Still no Amazon links to Macmillan client books.
What’s playing on the iPod right now? HUNGRY FOR YOU by The Police
Kristin’s incomplete list of why prologues don’t work:
1. When the sole purpose of the prologue is to fill the reader in on the back story so the real story can begin.
This is so easy to point out but harder to explain.
In the example of UNDONE, Brooke needed a prologue to show how it all started. To juxtapose who the girls were when they first “meet” versus who they are when chapter 1 begins. The prologue also serves a strong purpose. It sets tone, character, and sets up several questions. Why did Kori become a “I-puke-cheerleaders-for-breakfast” kind of girl? Something has happened but what? Why is Serena obsessed with her by her own admission? And it’s very clear that these two girls have nothing in common in this bathroom scene yet Kori calmly states that they are more alike than Serena knows. They are connected.
This is a prologue with a clear purpose. The reader should want to know more by the end or it doesn’t work. It’s also masterful. Brooke managed to accomplish quite a bit in just 4 short paragraphs and this leads me to the second reason why prologues often don’t work.
2. They are too long.
This is the death of a manuscript if a writer has problem #1 and then it’s combined with problem #2.
3. When the prologue is in a whole different style or voice from the rest of the manuscript.
Then when chapter 1 begins, readers are left flummoxed—especially if that style or tone of voice is never revisited.
4. When the prologue is solely there to provide an action scene to “draw the reader in” but then serves no other purpose or is not connected to the main story arc or is only loosely so.
5. When the prologue introduces the evil character simply so the reader can “know” what is at stake.
I can sum this up in two words. Clumsy writing.
6. When the prologue is supposed to be cool (or I might reword this to say the writer thinks it sounds cool).
Lots of writers overwrite when creating a prologue. It shows.
When all of the above is happening (and there are probably a dozen more reasons why prologues often don’t work), it becomes really clear that the writer isn’t paying attention to dialogue, character development, plot pacing, etc. All key elements of good writing.
This is why almost all the agents I know completely skip the prologue and start with chapter one when reading sample pages. A beginner writer might actually be able to do good character, dialogue, tone, pacing, and whatnot but it’s more than likely not going to show in the prologue.
Now in defense of the prologue, when it’s done well, it’s truly an amazing tool. The number of times I’ve seen a prologue done extraordinarily well in requested submissions? Well, I can count that total on two hands….
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STATUS: For a Monday, it was actually fairly quiet. Only one major issue to solve.
What’s playing on the iPod right now? RASBERRY BERET by Prince
I thought this a pertinent and timely entry in light of a lot of recent discussions I’ve seen in the comment section of agent blogs lately.
Megan’s debut hits shelves this week—all done with nary a networked connection.
I think every aspiring writer hears this message at least once: You don't have a hope of getting published unless you've got connections. I saw it pop up on message boards and websites as I was preparing GIVE UP THE GHOST for submission to agents, and couldn't help feeling nervous. After all, I'd never talked to an editor or an agent in my life. I didn't even live in the same country as most of them! And my close writer friends were currently unagented, so I didn't have a referral, either.
But I'd also read posts by authors talking about getting picked out of the slush pile, and agents mentioning their excitement at finding a gem in their inboxes, and that gave me hope. So instead of digging into my savings to fly off to every conference I could manage, I simply wrote a query letter, revised it, and started sending it out.
Three and a half years later, I have an agent, a publishing deal, and a book that just hit the shelves. I met Kristin in person for the first time this past May, two and a half years after we started working together.
I know now that there's nothing to worry about--people receive offers of representation and book deals without any prior connections all the time. I did, many of my writer friends did, and I've happily told this to writers who've said they're afraid they won't be able to find an agent or get published because they don't know anyone.
Unfortunately, I realized offering my experience isn't enough. Why should anyone believe me over those claiming that it's impossible? Maybe my case was just the exception.
Which is why, last month, I set out to collect solid data. 270 fiction authors from a variety of genres filled out a poll asking them about their experiences selling their first published novel. With the results now in, I say with assurance that the idea that you need connections to get published is nothing more than a myth.
62% of the agented authors who responded got the agent who sold their first book through cold querying--no prior meeting, no referral.
72% of the authors sold their first book to an editor they had no connection to (either by cold querying themselves, or submitting via their agent).
You can find my full discussion of the poll results here.
Can connections help you out? Of course! But if you don't have them, don't sweat it. I'm a Canadian author who signed with a Denver agent who sold to a New York editor without my having any prior connection to either of them, and that novel can be found right now in stores across both countries. If I can do it (along with more than a hundred other authors who answered the poll), there's no reason you can't, too.
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STATUS: I’m digging into a contract so now you will know what I’ll be doing for the next 2 hours….
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When I was at RWA, I did a workshop with my client Ally Carter. We were the only workshop at that conference that addressed anything in the Children’s realm. Let me tell you, the session was packed (to my surprise).
Anyway, the point of our workshop was this: people who want to write young adult always ask the wrong questions and we want to point that out and explain what the right question should be.
The best part of the workshop was the PowerPoint slides. We’d put up the wrong question on screen and you could feel the in-drawn breath of the entire audience. They had been thinking exactly that wrong question!
So sure enough, Sara got an email today from an aspiring writer asking one of those exact wrong questions. The person asked what is the right word count/length for his/her middle grade or young adult novel.
Gong. Wrong question.
The right question is this: how important is pacing in my middle grade or young adult novel?
See, it’s not about word count (look at the latter Harry Potter and Twilight books for goodness sake). Those books got some meat on them there bones—and it’s not just because they were hugely successful so therefore the author could use whatever length she wanted. It’s about pacing the novel so well, readers don’t mind length.
This September, I’ve got my first middle grade novel publishing. Helen Stringer’s SPELLBINDER is a whopping 372 pages long. And folks, this isn’t in larger print. It’s a long middle grade novel. But the trick is that it can’t feel like it when reading. The pacing has to be absolutely perfect. If it is, readers and editors will not quibble about the length.
So don’t ask me how many words or pages your project needs to be because I can’t tell you. If you are on the low side (like under 50,000 words for YA or under 40,000 words for MG), you might not have developed your story enough. However, I don’t know that for sure until I read it. Maybe you have written the perfect 30,000 word MG novel. I have no idea.
But what I can reinforce is this: asking about word count or page length is definitely the wrong question.
More Than Words (Acoustic) - Extreme
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STATUS: Bursting at the seams. Got two bits of exciting news for one of my clients and it’s under gag. We’re not allowed to share yet. So I guess I’ll just tease all my blog readers with it instead.
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This topic obviously resonated with quite a few people. In all honesty, I probably should have one of my clients do a guest blog about the topic of finances as a published author. Hopefully they’ll all just chime in on the comments section.
Okay, if you are a published author, here are some things that I recommend.
1. Find and then pay for a good tax accountant who can give you sound accounting advice for your writing business. You may start as a sole proprietor but as many of my authors have done, when real money starts coming in, it may pay (as in tax advantageous) to be an LLC or an S-corp instead.
When I say “pay for,” I mean it. It’s worth every dime to pay a CPA for his/her expertise. Be sure to ask around to other writers and get recommendations for a good one. Like all people in service industry, levels of expertise vary.
Gee, that’s true of agents as well.
2. When you have your contract, note the dates in your money management software for when you can expect to get paid. Then pad it by two months at least. I say this because things don’t always happen on time. The contract can take 2 to 3 months to negotiate and then it’s always another 6 weeks after signing for you to get paid. Foreign monies take even longer than that. As the agent, I always expect payment 6 months from when I’ve sent off the contract to my client for signing. It can take that long. For one client, the foreign publisher lost the contract and it took us a year to get paid. And that was even with me bugging them every other week for it.
You as the author might run into draft problems and not deliver the manuscript on time and so that d&a payment you were hoping to trigger might not happen until several months later. Trust me, this happens more often than not so keep that in mind.
So a couple of addendums to this:
--If you are a debut and your career is young, don’t start by living off your writing. I think you’ll find yourself in a world of hurt if you do that. Writing money is gravy money. Not factored in as part of the monthly living expenses but it can pay for a great vacation or a down payment on a car or what have you. Personally, I say put all of it into a good interest CD that you can’t access for a year. That way you’re forced to ignore it for a while. But heck, I know that’s not always feasible. I’m just suggesting it.
--Don’t quit you day job until the back end royalties can pay for your daily living expenses without issue. Back end is the royalty money you earn once your advance has earned out. This does not include the advance you might earn for your next book because that’s an advanced that hasn’t earned out yet. And just an FYI, statistically speaking (and this is by no means exact), only about 10% of books actually earn out their advances. The good majority of them don’t. And here’s another interesting tidbit, if a book does earn out the advance, it can take 2 years or more before that happens. One of my authors just earned out (which is hugely exciting) but it took 4 years. Now you know why I emphasize back end royalties that pay your daily living expenses without an issue.
3. When you get your check, pay your taxes right then and there. Now some folks are really great money managers. If you are, then you can ignore this. However, I think the majority of us are not quite that anal and I’ve heard stories time and time again where authors don’t do this and find themselves in a world of hurt. Work with your tax accountant to find out what is the likely percentage that you’ll owe and don’t wait, just mail the dang thing to the IRS and tell yourself, this was never my money anyway. If you don’t have a tax accountant, a good rule of thumb is 20% of whatever the check was and send that in. If you’ve overpaid, you’ll get it refunded.
If you’re disciplined money manager, okay, stick the monies you owe the IRS into a high-interest bearing account and then only draw from that account to pay your quarterly taxes (April 15, June 15, Sept. 15, Jan. 15). Make some money on the interest at the very least. Now if your honest with yourself and know that you’ll fall into the trap of thinking the next advance will pay those taxes, don’t wait. Mail your check to the IRS the minute you get your check from the publisher or agent. I can’t force you to do this but I’m really encouraging it.
4. When you get your check, pay yourself first. What exactly does this mean? That means you put away money for retirement even before you pay your bills. If you’re under the salary cap, open yourself up a ROTH IRA (one of the best investing tools out there because when you retire you won’t be taxed on monies you withdraw from a ROTH because you will have already paid the taxes on it). Damn straight folks. And even if you are not good with numbers and investing, just go to Vanguard’s website and look at the ROTH IRA here. Sign up for an index fund that follows the S&P 500. Usually those are the safest with the least amount of crazy ups and downs.
Max it out. Pay in the full amount you are allowed to legally in any given year.
And folks, I’ve been investing for years but I’m no expert. My suggestion here is not to replace advice from a professional financial advisor but if you don’t know where to begin, maybe this will help you to get started.
I’ll also try and dig up the money management/investing titles of all the books I’ve read over the years. It might be a good reading list for you.
5. Open up a SEP (Simplified Employee Pension Plan). You’re a writer and you’re self-employed. This is a retirement vehicle for the self-employed and it allows you, percentage wise, to put the most money away for retirement than you can in an IRA.
6. If you are living off of your writing, create a budget with all your expenses and only pay yourself X amount a month and stick to that. That way you won’t suddenly run out of money and be really anxious for your next payment (see above—which might get delayed, or yikes a contract canceled, or a manuscript rejected and you have to pay back the advance). All grim scenarios but can be a reality.
7. Buy yourself something nice to remember your first check by. I know. Totally opposite of everything I’ve said above but your first check from your first book advance is special. Celebrate it.
Then do all of the above.
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STATUS: Today was pretty quiet because of the President’s Day holiday. I like that. I accomplish a lot and it isn’t even Saturday.
What’s playing on the iPod right now? FAT BOTTOMED GIRLS by Queen
For 2009, I’m pretty much on conference and contest hiatus. There’s just too much of a time crunch to take on extra tasks or travel but last year, I had promised to participate in a very interesting contest. When January rolled around and it was time to say ‘yes’ to the commitment, I was true to my word.
So over the weekend, I did the Secret Agent contest on the blog misssnarksfirstvictim. Obviously the secret it out but over the weekend, I was reading and commenting on 60 submitted first pages.
The question I had to answer was: “Am I Hooked? Why or why not.”
In other words, it was exactly like reading our slush pile but in this case, the submitters got feedback.
Yeah, I thought that might perk up your ears a bit. And it’s definitely worth popping over there to read the entries and my response to them. I signed each of my comments with the moniker secret agent.
Since I have the wonderful Sara, it’s been a while since I’ve read the slush slush (so to speak) and I’ll tell you right now that two problems rose to the surface on why I said “not hooked, wouldn’t read further” on some of the entries and I’m going to share those two things with my blog readers right now.
The two top problems were:
1. To much telling instead of showing the character in the scene (or too heavy a reliance on back story to jumpstart the story).
And
2. Not enough mastery of the craft—in other words, the writing needed to be tightened. Too much wordiness, overuse of adverbs, immediately explaining what was just revealed in dialogue, etc.
So if you are wondering how an agent reads and responds to an opening page, you might want to give that blog a look and read through the entries and the comments.
And here’s another interesting thing to note. When I did the contest, most of the the participants had already responded to each entry. I deliberately did not read any of the response comments until I had left my own comment first.
I was amazed at how often the things that tripped me up where spotted and noted by the author writers participating and reading the blog contest.
You want those folks for your critique group. I’m just saying….
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STATUS: One of my goals for this travel week was to get caught up on the fulls we have requested. The week is drawing to an end. I’d better hop to it!
What’s playing on the iPod right now? SOS by Rihanna
You know I almost never respond to questions in the comment section but one astute reader asked a question that really got me thinking. Have I ever asked for a full manuscript, started to fall in love, and then had the manuscript jump the shark halfway or three quarters of the way through the full?
The answer is yes. In fact, that should be in capital letters-- YES. It doesn’t happen often but when it does, it can be a huge sad moment.
It’s one reason why agents always read until the end—even if they are sure they love the voice, the plot, and what have you. There really is such a thing as a manuscript suddenly taking a sharp left turn and leaving the agent stunned and confused.
What’s interesting though is this. I don’t keep a running track record but I do know of a few authors whose first projects I read, really liked, had this happened so I ultimately passed on that novel who then went on to get agented (and sold) with a later manuscript. Sometimes it’s just that last little kernel of knowledge that the author needed to learn about plotting before having it all click on a more mature manuscript.
In fact, one of the authors I have right now is a writer I passed on originally for her first manuscript (not exactly for this reason but for something close). I then took her on for her second novel and sold it at auction.
So when I see it, I always tell the writer that the manuscript diverged too suddenly for me (and why) but we see talent here and would be open to seeing future stuff.
Sometimes they take us up on it. Sometimes they end up represented by an agent friend (which is how I ended up knowing about it). Otherwise I’m pretty sure I wouldn’t remember as I don’t keep track.
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STATUS: As much as I enjoyed Worldcon (the SFWA and TOR party were quite fun on Friday), I must say I’m just relieved to be sitting here alone in my office just working away.
What’s playing on the iPod right now? FOR ONCE IN MY LIFE by Michael Bublé
On Saturday, I attended a panel entitled “Writing 101: Authors Take Questions from the Audience.”
Now this may be an odd panel for an agent to attend (being that I’m not an author) but I do think it’s valuable to hear what established authors have to say to aspiring writers. At the very least, it’s going to be a healthy reminder to me of what struggling writers face out there in the trenches.
Besides, I was just interested in hearing what war stories Harry Turtledove, Kate Elliott (I’m a big fan) and Kay Kenyon had to share.
It was a good panel and I’m glad to have attended. I think the best pearls of wisdom that I gleamed from their talk are these two:
1. All writers have felt like they’ve been kicked to the curb at some point in their career (be it trying to land an agent, accessing an editor at a publishing house, or sifting through the myriad of rejections). You are not alone and the best you can do is to keep writing because that’s what writers do. All established authors have at least one manuscript that will never see the light of day. Many have several.
2. Wherever you are now in your writing is not where you will always be. These established authors said that they couldn’t reread their first published novels because ack, they are so much better now; they can hardly believe that such dreck actually was published (my take: even established authors are hard on themselves!). You will learn and grow as a writer and your rejections today might simply be a memory tomorrow.
Good advice I think.
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STATUS: TGIF! Really, what more is there to say?
What’s playing on the iPod right now? WHEN YOU COME by Crowded House
Let’s round off this week by focusing on one more mistake Sara and I have been seeing lately. We call it the opening-chapter-back-story-info-dump.
That pretty much sums it up.
But if you want more details, this is when writers feel like they can’t begin their story until the readers know and understand the back story, or the history of the character who opens the novel, or how the world works (if this is SF or fantasy). So, the opening chapter usually has nothing to do with the direction of the rest of the novel but the writer hasn’t mastered the ability to integrate it seamlessly as the real-time story unfolds.
The writing is almost always explanation (telling instead of showing) with very little dialogue, scene action, or character development.
Auto NO response every time.
This is often why prologues don’t work.
And don’t be fooled, the chapter back story info dump is sometimes disguised by coming in chapter 2 or chapter 3 but can be characterized by many pages where the above telling versus showing happens at the expense of dialogue, plot, character, or scenes to move the story forward.
So don’t just breathe a sigh of relief if you’ve checked your opening chapters and it’s not there. The large info dump chunk can sneak in later. If the chunk comes later and the rest of the novel is decent until then, we agents will allow some wiggle room because that issue can be easily edited if it’s just a one time snafu. I find that if this problem exists though, many of the other beginning writer mistakes are present as well.
Have a happy editing weekend!
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STATUS: I've got a lot of phone calls to do to start my day.
What’s playing on the iPod right now? 50 WAYS TO LEAVE YOUR LOVER by Simon & Garfunkel
This one is certainly a lesser evil and in comparison to some of the other writer mistakes we’ve talked about this week, low on the totem pole. But I do think it’s worth mentioning although I’m pretty sure I’ve already discussed this at least once on my blog.
The overdone title.
A couple of thoughts to keep in mind:
1. Sometimes simple works—and works really well. (TWILIGHT for example). Don’t make a title more complicated then you need.
My client Jenny O’Connell has a great example of this with her two current back-to-back releases from MTV/Pocket Books: LOCAL GIRLS and RICH BOYS.
My sense is that you can probably figure out the direction of the story just from the titles. The first book, Local Girls, is about two teens who have grown up on island of Martha’s Vineyard. They are the local girls until one teen’s mother gets remarried to a rich tourist and takes the family from the island to Boston. The story takes place the next summer where the once local girl has returned as a tourist and will the friendship survive?
Rich Boys is, yep, you got it. A local girl hired to babysit a wealthy summer family’s little girl becomes entangled with the wealthy family’s older son who, after a disastrous first year of college, is bent on wreaking havoc.
Simple but grabby.
2. Avoid the pithy title with the long, rambling subtitle. I cannot tell you how often I see this. The title can be something like (and I’m making this up off the top of my head), The Survivor Chronicles (which could be a rather cool title if you think about it!). And then the author ruins it with the lengthy subtitle such as (and yes, this is an exaggeration)—a memoir about a young abused woman coming of age, discovering her bi-polarism, embracing her sexuality and finally triumphing against all odds.
Heck, I don’t need to read the book anymore…And yes, unfortunately, I do recognize that the professionals in the publishing industry are often guilty of this but as writers, there is no need for you to fall into this trap.
3. In general, avoid titles that might be hard to pronounce or difficult to spell.
4. To Be a Long Title or Not to Be a Long title? That is the question. And the answer is that it depends.
AND THEN WE CAME TO THE END works because as readers, we totally get it and the longer title is memorable.
Same with I’D TELL YOU I LOVE YOU BUT THEN I’D HAVE TO KILL YOU. We’ve all used a similar phrase often so the longer title works.
But then you have the power of the short title such as Brooke Taylor’s UNDONE.
This title can be read in so many ways. It leaves a question in the reader’s mind. What is undone? Does it mean incomplete? Or, to come undone? In this case, it’s the first question. What is left undone is the 5 wishes of a teen girl who dies and her best friend, Serena, decides to complete the list and in doing so, discovers who she really is.
The short title can be evocative.
And speaking of short titles and writer mistakes, you might want to check out this soon-to-be released slim volume called HOW FICTION WORKS by James Wood. Funny, he's tackling all the issues that I've just talked about on this blog. Powerful stuff.
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Thanks so much for this.
I've been struggling and struggling with my POV.
I've heard it said so many times that the third person POV is best for romance...but it just sounded so...blahhh...
I coulnd't stand to write like that anymore with this character.
It felt too 'he said, she said, they did that' to me. I wanted to really pin down the camera.
Maybe in a nother one. I feel released from the stress of 'which way is best here?!' kind of thing.
Thank you, thank you, thank you!
I think first person makes for an easier write, personally. Especially since the narrative part of the story can have a lot of flavor too, which isn't as normal in third person.
I also like using the "not there" first person - i.e. someone is clearly telling the story, but they're not actually part of the story, so it's in third person. (Is there any actual word for that, like first person omniscient or something? I'm sure there must be...)
Personally, I write whichever works best for the plot. If I change POVs often, I use third person. If I plan on using a plot that has a constant MC, I use first person. Really, it's all a matter of which works best.
I'm a writing professor and just finished a three-year long evaluation of 200+ randomly chosen YA books. The goal was to determine the extent to which external marketing drives sales and, in cases where sales exceeded or did not meet sales expectations, what caused the difference.
In YA, writing in first person was a huge advantage.
I didn't study adult books, so I can't tell you there. But in YA I would almost always always go with first person.
(my guess is that due to the developmental stages typical to adolescence, identity formation is a key motivation for reading and/or intellectual investigation. First person allows the reader to more fully immerse themselves into the protagonist--as if the story was happening to *them.*)
From 3rd person to first person, present tense (which Hunger Games is in) is a huuuge difference. I wonder if she did first person past tense as well.
Regarding headhopping -- Stephanie Meyer did some first person head hopping in Breaking Dawn. It worked well, I thought, although I think it would only work in long stretches. Chapter by chapter headhopping in 1st person would get a little tiring.
I think first person is much more difficult to write, especially with some genres, like thriller. Some writers - like Steve Martini - do it exceptionally well, but when its done poorly, it shows.
Funny you posted this when you did. I pulled out an ms today that I hadn't touched in about a month or so. After writing about 50 pages--and every page a strugge--I set it aside in favor of more productive projects. Just this afternoon, I looked at it again, and thought maybe I should try it from a different angle (first person instead of third), and wow, what a difference. I have a new motivation to work on it again... unfortunately, I have other another project that is too far along now to stop the momentum (and ironically, it hadn't even been started when I'd set this other one aside). Such is how it goes. *sigh* I know I'll get back to it eventually, probably even by late summer, but it's hard to let that spark extinguish once it's been reignited.
This isn't the first time I've made a POV switch mid-draft, but I've never done it after *completing* a first draft. Usually, it happens within the first 50 pages, because by that point, I have a pretty good idea of whether something is working well or not.
@Kerry - Are you publishing your work anywhere? It sounds really interesting.
Thanks, Lehcarjt.
We're working on the write-ups now, but we're looking to publish in some academic journals when we finish polishing the conclusions and such.
I've got a chapter coming out in a Palgrave-Macmillan textbook on creative writing and some of it will be there, though textbooks can be pricey and I think this one doesn't come out till next year.
I have a research-results summary I'd be happy to send you if you'd like. Just email me: [kerryspencer at byu dot edu.]
And on the jumping between character heads thing...
I think it's supposed to be sort of gauche in adult lit, but in YA lit, we found that it increased resonance levels in readers. not sure why, but go ahead and do it if it works. It might even help your sales.
*chiming in about YA in first person*
I've found that first person works well in YA (both as a reader and a writer), for all the reasons stated above. Nice to see that thinking backed up by clinical results. :)
I agree that it depends on the story. My completed YA is in 3rd person, but the YA I've just started is in 1st person. It wasn't intentional - it's just how the story came out.
When I read Hunger Games, I got the distinct impression in many scenes that it was crying out to be written in past tense instead of present. Honestly, I think it would have been better that way. It would be interesting to see some of those third person pages of hers if she did make a switch.
I wrote my book in third because I switch POV several times depending on where the "action" is at that point. The young readers who've read it so far have really liked the movement.
Mary Kole was just talking about this on her blog (kidlit.com) It's one of those things (one of thousands) that no one can tell you which way is best.
I wrote my WIP in first and third for about 75 pages. Both had their pros and cons, but finally I decided to go with third and I'm happy with it.
At some point you've just got to make decisions and commit to them. You can second guess yourself until the end of time.
Ugh. Head hopping is rarely a good idea. Even in third person.
However, close-third allows the reader to get into the character's head, with only one POV character.
Personally, I prefer first person for YA, and close-third for MG.
Fascinating research, Kerry!
I've never been able to write well in third-person POV...my characters always come out flat and 1D, with little life and spark.
Something I've noticed in YA (and maybe this is just me, I don't know) is that head-hopping first-person POVs are not uncommon (i.e. Rules of Attraction, Shiver), and that even when third-person POV is used, it tends not to head-hop but stays very closely with one character (i.e. Harry Potter, Fire, The Giver, etc).
I also thought it was interesting that romance prefers third-person POV. I've always wondered why I didn't read more romances with first-person POVs since heavy emotions are involved (and since men don't really read romances I would think there's less need to head-hop into the male lead's head)....but I guess the genre must have its reasons that I'm too naive to see!
I have to chime in against head-hopping. I have been taken out of story so many times when an author bounces from one character's thoughts to another mid-scene. It makes me have to figure out who's thinking or why we aren't with the main character. Unless a writer is really skilled and can do it seamlessly (there are those authors), I think it has potential for losing the reader. I don't mind if it's done at scene breaks with set-up line that lets you know which character you're with.
Whether choosing the POV to use or deciding whether to alternate POV, I think the author should have solid reasons for being in a particular viewpoint.
And you can also add mystery by not having too many viewpoints. It bugs me to have a mystery or secret revealed at the end that a veiwpoint character would have known but never thought about during the course of the story. I feel manipulated by that scenario.
That's my two cents, which I toss around freely on this subject, realizing that other people may disagree.
how interesting about hunger games.
i haven't read it, but i did the same thing with my current work in progress. i was already over 50 pages in when i realized it just wasn't working as well as i thought it should.
so i decided to rewrite in first person and compare which was better. i even gave both versions to a couple beta readers who both agreed with me: first person pov was better for this novel.
kristen is absolutely right when she says you have to choose the one that is a better fit and best illustrates the main characters.
True, comes down to the story..though it does get disturbing when one's writing in first POV and you know the person and they are going on and on about some really weird stuff..really disturbing
It's not head-hopping; it's toggling narrative distance, LOL.
I've learned a lot by re-writing something in third that I've written in first. In fact, I've even gone so far as to write something in first, re-write in third, and then re-write in first. A lot of good things come of that exercise. If one has the time, lol.
How convenient! I was just discussing my own issues with this problem today! Of course, I wasn't thinking in terms of 'which sells better?', but in terms of 'which can I support more?'
I'd say 99% of my writing has been in 3rd person. I've used it consistently for upwards of 5 years now, and I'm comfortable with it. Then, out of the blue, my character decides SHE wants to tell her story, so step aside. What's more, she decided this at 4am and dragged me out of bed to start it. Not very nice at all.
Now I'm left with the decision of whether I want to continue letting her take the reigns - if she'll actually be able to control herself for the whole story - or if I want to fall back into my comfort zone. And what if I make the wrong choice and end up 50 or 100 pages in with no place to go? Ugh.
First person POV is great if you want to suffuse a whole story in a single character's voice. It helps to encourage the reader to identify with the character and it keeps the author grounded in that character's sensibility. And there's a smoothness and efficiency to aligning the reader with the same character in every single scene.
This is especially effective in mystery or suspense type novels where the reader and the character are both kind of confused, and trying to figure out what's going on. It also works very well in YA or chick lit stories where the reader and protagonist are trying together to decode social cues and figure out the motives of the other characters. If you hate first-person, though, a close limited third person narration can be just as effective.
Head jumping and perspective shifts become impossible in first person, eliminating any tricky choices about how and when to do these things. Authorial decisions about what to describe and how to describe things can be simplified by filtering those decisions through the character.
However, when significant plot events take place outside that character's presence, it is often more elegant to jump to a different perspective character, rather than relating these events to the first-person narrator (and the reader) as expository dialog. This is especially true in some complicated thrillers or fantasy/sci-fi epics, where plot events are happening simultaneously to different characters in different places.
If you want the reader to know something the protagonist does not, or to focus on some detail that the protagonist ignores, it is very difficult to achieve that in first person. Similarly, if the protagonist knows some big twist or secret that the reader does not, the reveal will feel like a cheat in the intimate confines of first person. And sometimes, you may want to keep some distance between the protagonist and the reader, so the reader can doubt the character's motives.
If you really love first-person, it is possible to solve these problem by shifting among multiple first person narrators, but it is very difficult to manage multiple distinct narrative voices in a single story.
Good answer.
The main sub-genre that I feel isn't a good match for first person is Epic Fantasy. Doesn't sound like a good plan to me.
My first YA novel, that I'm still working on, is one where I wrote the first draft in first person. It's now in third person. I had to get through it all and really see where things were going before figuring out that it won't work in that point of view. Things like that happen.
And the truth is that you're right. It's whatever fits best with that story. That, and maybe what the author prefers to write in. If a writer dislikes first person, or third person, then that may hinder their writing if they try to force it on themselves.
I've been a subscriber to this blog for only a short time thus far, but I have to say, I think Kristin is inside my head. It seems like her blog posts perfectly correspond to whatever writer dilemna is currently plaguing me.
While writing my current manuscript, I ran into problems deciding on a PoV. I caught myself hopping from my MC's 1st to side scenes where I would use 3rd as my MC wasn't present, giving the reader a "sneak peek." I honestly don't know if it will end up working, but I've decided to go with it and see where it will take me. I can always cut/change it in the end, as good writing is mostly in the revision.
I also read a great article online about it: http://www.tarakharper.com/k_frstpr.htm I'm not affiliated with that website in any way, but I found it helpful.
This is a great question, and one that hardly gets any air time. Kudos to you Kristin! I love your blog and this is why.
I too have experienced the epiphany that my book would work better in first person than third. This was an apocalyptic book, and I just wasn’t feeling the events the way I wanted to. So I changed the POV from third to first.
I discovered something. It’s possible to write something almost as intimate as first person in third person limited. There is a slight difference, but I think the largest different exists in our minds. We think “oh, this is third person, it’s not as intimate as first” so we just write from the distance we’re used to. I had a lot of fun writing another book in third person limited and trying to keep it as intimate as first person. You guys should try it sometime. Write a passage in first, especially if the protagonist is opinionated, and then switch it to third. Start by just changing pronouns, and the character name to “I”.
There is a difference, of course, but it doesn’t have to be as big as you think.
Personally, I think first person gets overused. I love first person, but I have read many a novel where I think it should have been written in third. The character didn’t have a really strong, unique voice, and so things were sort of hum-hum. It wouldn’t have been as bad in third person. I think if you’re going the first person route, you need to make sure your character has a unique, distinct voice to tell your story. Otherwise it’s a hindrance.
I actually have a difficult time writing in first person. Third has alwasy been easiest for me to write, but I know I ought to learn how to write first person better in order to become a well rounded writer.
Anyway my current book is third. My only issue is trying to figure out if I should add another perspective or not. I've added a few scenes with my other character but it's seems stilted, probably because I don't "know" him well enough yet. Guess I just have to keep writing!
A great topic to think about. I'm not sure what I feel about third person vs first person. When I wrote the first pages of my project and sent it out to my critique group, they all agreed that first person would be difficult to pull off and that third person would sound more "professional". I think perhaps it's because I'm writing in the fantasy genre, and they also said there are an abundance of terrible novels in first person. But I love first person, I think there's something interesting about seeing things from such a narrow perspective.
Both my published novels were entirely rewritten from a different POV. I started my adult novel in first person, but received a critique that the narrator lacked the life experience and insight to carry the story. I switched to third person, which also allowed me to get into the heads of the two other principal characters, one who in the course of the revision clearly became the protagonist. In the process of revising, more than half of the scenes were new, to accommodate the other two characters' perspectives.
In the case of the YA, I originally wrote it in third person, but the editor felt she couldn't connect with the story. At that time I was young and maybe didn't have the skill yet to switch into a first person teenage male voice. (For some reason, switching the POV didn't occur to any of us.) I gained that skill when I wrote the adult novel from the first person POV of a woman hardly out of her teens, so the false start wasn't a total waste. I gutted the YA, leaving only the first chapter (in third person for reasons that become evident later on in the story) and rewriting the rest--all new scenes, too--from alternating first person POV. And while the story is mainly told from the POV of the male protagonist, his girlfriend narrates about 60 pages in the middle because she sneaks off and finds out/experiences things that he can't know--in this way heightening the urgency and dramatic irony.
Just wanted to comment that I recently finished All Roads Lead Me Back to You by Kennedy Foster (one of Janet Reid's books) and she headhops within scenes and does it brilliantly. I'd been anti-headhopping till I read her book. I really can't imagine the story being told another way.
I wrote my last YA in 1st person. This time I'm using third. I know 1st person is really popular in YA. I just can't bring myself to do it this time. I mostly stay in one character's head, but occasionally need to show something else. It's a tough, tough call. Especially when 1st person feels like an easier write.
I am personally not a fan of head-hopping EVER. I've read tons of other agents are very anti-head-hopping as well. On the flip side, I don't consider switching to another characters POV at a chapter break head-hopping, nor do I consider it head-hopping when you switch at a scene break.
I don't mind switching character POV's during a chapter change, but I dislike it during a scene change. Furthermore, I am much more comfortable with switching "heads" in third person than in first.
Lastly, I think third person should ALWAYS be third person limited (or close third, or whatever). Unless you are writing third person omniscient, and are CLEARLY not in any one persons head, it is rough on the reader to jump back and forth, and they will lose that all-important connection to the main character.
JMHO.
I'm not a huge fan of reading third person (it takes longer for me to get into the story), and when I try to write in 3P, it always falls flat.
I do read third person sometimes, if I love the concept enough, but the whole omniscient (I think that's the right word ... my brain is friend), head-hopping thing isn't for me. I need the writer to focus on one character per chapter, or at least per section. Otherwise, it starts to feel like talking heads, and I can't get grounded in the story.
@jessjordan: I agree with the omniscient comment. This post inspired me to write about the common POV's... you should see what I wrote... kinda backs up your feeling.
http://www.cmichaelfontes.com/
"Last week we asked for a full manuscript from a partial we had read. The writer emailed to say he was contemplating a big revision shifting POV."
I'm absolutely astounded that an aspiring writer would have the nerve to do that. My God, if the agent liked the partial's POV, just send the full out. Don't start overhauling the whole manuscript now and wasting the agent's time!
Kristin wrote: If we need to be inside the main character’s head, then first person POV. If the story would benefit from being able to head hop (as you can do in third person), well, then there you have it.
A little POV 101.
In first person, we're "inside" the main character's head only as they report to us. They may or may not be telling us the truth -- the unreliable narrator -- depending upon why is they are telling this story [that is, what triggered the story or what is their purpose in telling the story]; who is their contextualized audience [you would tell the same story differently to a police officer then you would your best friend in a locker room]; and, what is the narrative distance in time [that interval between where the narrator is now in their life and the moment of when the events recounted occurred]. Third person doesn't have those issues of reliability. Moreover, if you write in third person using free indirect discourse, the narrative is right inside the mind of a focalizing character (a "focalizer"), unmediated, as the narrator and focalizer "share" a consciousness. So it's not accurate to say you get in the mind of a character in first person and you don't in third.
Second, it's true that, in third person, depending upon how the narrative distance in space is manipulated (the distance between the narrator and the focalizer), depending on the level of omniscience, you can move more or less freely among focalizers. This allows a different kind of freedom than first person but one that many writers use simply to give us information for the sake of plot. Because you can change focalizers doesn't mean you should. But, let us not forget that many writers, among them, Barry Hannah and Philip Roth, have used first person omniscience to great effect. The same "head hopping" (I don't like that term I'm afraid), Kristin refers to. We can naturalize these by believing that the narrator, as a reporter might do, learned what happened from other characters and then presents the novel as if they were there as the events unfolded.
Many (new) writers assume that writing in first person is easier to write because of their strong personal identification with the "I" of the story. But they don't realize that the "I" is a construct, just another character.
Perhaps the reason that some of the commenters here have a problem writing in third person is because they don't quite get how to manipulate that narrative distance in space. If there is distance, if there is narratorial mediation (and by that I mean the narrator is constantly telling us what a focalizer is seeing or thinking or feeling rather than just give us what is seen or thought or felt), if there is a disconnect between the diction and imagery and word choice, the language used, in the story and the worldview of a focalizer, this will cause the problems described in the comments.
I teach English for YA's and I recently had a conversation w/ one of my students on this very topic. She started to read a novel and gave up. When I asked her why, she said, "I hate when they talk in first person."
Funny thing... A couple of weeks before I had checked out the same book out our library, read a couple of chapters, and then put it down for EXACTLY the same reason.
So I think first person is trendy in YA right now, but I don't think it's a MUST DO, if you get my drift.
I don't think first person is going to work well in YA with a grand theme, eg, Pullman or Rowling for example -- there's too much that can't be conveyed. Small ideas like Twilight. . .obviously yes, and perhaps middle grade as well.
Third close/limited is much more flexible and useful.
I've tried omniscient third. It just doesn't work for me. I can't manage head-hopping properly and end up falling back on one person's POV by the end of the scene. I tend to play it in limited third from the start, now, and then head-hop around via subsections within the chapter, but each section is a single person's POV.
I'm a bit of an orator, so first person humor comes very naturally to me. Third person narrative humor is a lot harder to pin down, but it's almost more rewarding for it. I have a satire in the works that pretty much begs to be written in first person, though. Who am I to argue?
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I like to use second person for short stories- it keeps the narrative tight
Thanks - this is one of those things that goes around - no one want this, editors will shoot you down if you do that, when the reality is you should write the book the BEST was possible.You can't remind writers of that enough.
Maybe your prospective client can do like Jodi Thomas, whose "Twisted Creek" has both first person and third person pov?
Ordinarily, I wouldn't suggest it, but it worked out really well in Twisted Creek. The protaganist was in first person, but when the pov switched to the male mc, it was third person.
I love reading third person, myself, but her character had such a voice, that I was totally caught up in the first person chapters, then when it switched to third, I was equally happy, because that's what I love.
Anyway, just a thought. :-)